Monday, August 8, 2011
What do you think of this intro to my book? litteraly 7 lines?
Yeah, but to tell the truth the writing feels a little choppy, friendships and bonds are synonyms. we will never, ever feels like it should be the beginning of a sentence not the end. Also your use of antonyms started out good, but friendships and betrayal aren't quite antonyms. To answer the question it does compel me to read the very next paragraph, not much more, it would be a lot stronger if it was revised, also it would be a lot easier to critic if I knew what you were writing about, it sounds kind of cliche at this point.
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